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GA Review

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Passed. — GhostRiver 01:52, 7 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 14:25, 26 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]


Hello! My name is GhostRiver, and I'll be conducting this GA review. I will assess the article against the good article criteria. Once I complete my review, you will have seven days to implement the suggested edits.

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

History

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Ellen Phillips Samuel

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  • Per an early publication from FPAA, Samuel was specifically born March 8, 1849
  • She died in 1913 and bequeathed much of her estate → Upon her death in 1913, she bequeathed much of her estate
 Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Initial plans

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  • Women are widows, men are widowers
 Fixed -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • If you plan to link "will", do so in the first paragraph, not under "Initial plans"
 Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'd swap the note so that the main prose says "East River Drive", as that was her actual stipulation, and then make the rename the note
  • Bunford was criticized by some in the local art community → Some in the local art community criticized Bunford for active voice
 Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • any plans for commissioning more art → any plans to commission more art
 Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • "though he remained hopeful"
 Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • The second paragraph is the only time after her widower is first introduced that he's referred to as "J. Bunford" and not just "Bunford"
 Fixed -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • "chosen by art association president"
minus Removed -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • You should add "who" before "created an overall design for the memorial", but that makes the sentence quite long
 Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • East Coast should be capitalized as it refers to a region and not a general concept
 Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Semicolons after "the settlement of the east coast" and after "and immigration"
 Done

First Sculpture International (1933)

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  • which would run from May → which ran from May
 Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Per MOS:OVERLINK, major countries like England, France, and Russia don't need to be linked
 Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Second Sculpture International (1940)

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  • of foreign artists → by foreign artists
 Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Sentence structure in second para could be clarified - are both the Calder mobiles by the entrance as well, or just the rotating sculpture?
  • "Art critics questioned the classification"
minus Removed -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • over the value of abstract art → on the value of abstract art
 Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Inflation calculator for the values in the last paragraph

Third Sculpture International (1949)

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  • where sculptures were for sale suggest revising to something like "pieces" to reduce repetition of "sculptures"
 Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Dedication and later history

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  • A commemorative plaque affixed to the memorial for the memorial reads: Holy repetition, Batman!
 Fixed -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • The next year, Jacques Lipchitz bronze work, Missing possessive
 Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Sculptures

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  • North, South, and Central Terrace are capitalized here but not in History
  • "relief" doesn't need to be linked in both Settling of the Seaboard and The Birth of a Nation
 Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Analysis

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  • cricized typo
 Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • South Terrace is capitalized here but not in the History section
 Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Notes and references

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  • Good

General comments

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  • No stability concerns, nominator is main editor
  • Images are appropriate and are properly licensed
  • CV report looks good, almost all proper nouns and direct quotations

Putting on hold. Please ping me when everything has been addressed. — GhostRiver 19:45, 17 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@JJonahJackalope Just to let you know, I've went ahead and already addressed some basic stuff in the article and they're marked above. Good luck on getting the article to GA and lmk if anything else is requested of me! -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
GhostRiver, just wanted to ping you to let you know that I have reviewed your GA review and made some additional edits to address the points you raised. Additionally, I want to thank Dcdiehardfan for their help. Please let me know if you have any further questions, comments, or concerns regarding the article. -JJonahJackalope (talk) 15:59, 24 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@GhostRiver, are you able to close this review? -- asilvering (talk) 16:59, 21 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
JJonahJackalope Apologies for the delay. Bipolar disorder is difficult. Passing now. — GhostRiver 01:51, 7 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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